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你大概想表达的意思:
【这里只列核心意思,详细下,你在跟老外聊天或者在公共场合表达,你大概想表达的意思是下面的内容,尽量展开多说一些,一定要开口说出来,不要在脑海里默想】
幸福的关键是专注于当下。我们沉浸于做事情的时候通常是最幸福的。
不会组织语言的人说的:
The key to happiness is to focus on the moment.
When we put our all heart to do somethings, we can always feel the happiest.
问题:
1、语法问题 put our all heart to do somethings应该改为 put our whole heart into doing something,或者when we’re fully engaged with what we’re doing
2、句子信息比较简单,属于说了一句就不知道说什么了的情况,下面红框的句型/词汇是能帮助我们拓宽思维讲述更多信息的表达,可以参考
TED中超强组织语言
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The key to happiness is to stay in the moment.
幸福的关键是专注于当下。
When we’re lost in the moment, when we’re fully engaged with what we’re doing, we’re usually at our happiest.
当我们沉浸在当下,全神贯注于正在做的事情时,我们通常是最幸福的。
And this is true whether we’re working or playing, whether we’re with other people or by ourselves.
无论是工作还是玩耍,无论是和别人在一起还是独自一人,都是如此。
The more we can focus on the present, the more we can savor the here and now, the happier we’re likely to be. (savor the here and now 这里是品味此时此刻,here作为名词,看起来好像句子有语法问题,实际是ok的)
我们越能专注于当下,越能品味此时此刻,我们就越有可能幸福。
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拓展内容:
上面这段话,红色框中 when、whether、the more 都是引导的状语从句(分别是时间状语、让步状语、比较状语)
状语作为句子中一个重要修饰成分或补充成分,是非常好的帮助表达信息更丰富的结构。
比如当你不知道说什么时,就可以从增加状语或状语从句的角度来展开信息。
例如描述一次旅行经历,若只是简单陈述 “I visited Beijing.” 显得十分单薄。
可以添加时间状语,“Last summer, I visited Beijing.”
再进一步,加入目的状语从句,“Last summer, in order to experience the rich history and culture of China, I visited Beijing.” 瞬间丰富了旅行的动机。
若想更生动,还能运用方式状语,“Last summer, in order to experience the rich history and culture of China, I excitedly took a high - speed train and visited Beijing.” “excitedly” 展现出当时的情绪,“took a high - speed train” 说明了出行方式。
或者利用让步状语从句,“Last summer, even though I was quite busy with work, in order to experience the rich history and culture of China, I excitedly took a high - speed train and visited Beijing.”
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