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当你大概想表达的意思：
走出心碎的阴影并非易事，但倘若你不被内心的痛苦迷惑，主动采取行动来治愈自己，就能极大地减轻痛苦。而且你还能多花时间陪伴家人朋友，也可以避免工作受到影响。
不会组织语言的人说的：
It's not easy to get over a broken heart. But if you don't let the pain control you and do things to get better, you'll feel less pain.
And you can have more time to be with your family and friends. And you can also avoid to make bad effect on your work.
问题点评：
整体表述还是比较清晰的，主要问题在用词和搭配上，有一些词不达意和不准确
比如 do things to get better 可以改为 take steps to heal
比如 avoid to make bad effect on your work. 可以改为 avoid having a negative impact on your work
TED中超强组织语言
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Getting over heartbreak is hard, but if you refuse to be misled by your mind and you take steps to heal, you can significantly minimize your suffering.
走出心碎的阴影并非易事，但倘若你不被内心的痛苦迷惑，主动采取行动来治愈自己，就能极大地减轻痛苦。
And it won't just be you who benefit from that. You'll be more present with your friends, more engaged with your family, not to mention the billions of dollars of compromised productivity in the workplace that could be avoided.
而且，从中受益的不只是你自己。你会更多地陪伴朋友，更积极地融入家庭生活，更不用说还能避免职场上因情绪问题造成的工作产出损失了。
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